This could be better (no offence, just doing what the review section is for) There are obviously some major points you can inprove on. Firstly and probably the most obvious of them all is the quality of the artwork, I know it seems like a drag and yes it is worth it in the end. Secondly you shouldnt leave gaps throughout the dialoge of the animation trust me, it helps. Thirdly, try and ake it a little more clear what you are trying o make a parody/"generic anime episode" on.
I am sorry if the reason for the quality is poor on purpose but I do see potential even though it is only a slight glimmer. You have got the skill. You have got the team/friends. You have git the resources. Now please use them.